WRITING MY NOVEL
Constructing Scenes: Dialogue, Revisions, Notes
The last three sections of the Scene Sketch are mostly supportive of the rest. Once I have made entries for everything up through the external and internal value progressions (see Writing My Novel in Chapter Three #65), I pretty much have the scene figured out. Now I want to draft. Depending on the scene’s Story Event, though, I may need to do some more thinking first.
Once again, here is my scene sketch template:
Scene Sketch
In a scene where I have significant dialogue (yes, I spell it the old English way), it usually helps me to think it through before I begin drafting. This is really just notes on what I want my characters to say and the information I want them to convey. That is, things I don’t want to omit in the frenzy of drafting.
These dialogue notes all go under the “Dialogue” section in the sketch. It may consist of actual dialogue, but is usually just notes. Whatever I think will provide me the needed nudges when I am writing.
Here’s an example of dialogue notes from Legacy of the Ancients:
Dialogue
1. Kent (with Nia, Taurus-Bel, Nathan Tor) demands the reason for the chase of Zane through town. He is sterner, gruff, and more like his old self. Zane notes the change and (internally) relates it to other undoings of the TTR discharge effects.
2. Zane relates his encounter with Loam and escape from the Corbyn leading to the chase in Dentville. Zane does not tell Kent about the maps. He does say that Loam died while they hid behind the waterfall on Cain’s Creek.
3. Kent presses for answers from Zane: why the Corbyn were chasing Loam? Who was Loam? (guess by TB is that he was a Sedona agent). Kent becomes harsh, prompting a reaction from Nia. Nathan Tor speaks in support of Nia.
4. Kent releases Zane, strongly advising him to reveal any other details he “remembers.”
At this point, I usually start drafting. Of course, there may be things I want to consider about the scene and refer to as I am drafting. Just as likely, there will be things I come up with as I am drafting that I want to note for later consideration. These are miscellaneous items and I enter them in the Notes section. For example:
Notes
Kent’s hair has darkened to iron gray. He is a stern badass again. This rekindles conflict in Nia.
Zane is saved by Kent and a squad of Dentville warriors, but the Corbyn mostly escape. A few are killed and one is captured.
Somewhere note his recovery from the illness that struck him at the end of POA. Possibly note this in Zane’s interior monologue.
Feature Nia in this scene. Should show some contention over Kent’s growing harshness.
And finally, I have a place for Revisions in the scene sketch. At anytime in the scene creation process, but especially after it has been drafted, I will come up with revisions needed that are specific to that scene. As I work with a scene, I am pretty constantly coming up with needed changes. And I note revisions that come out of our COLA3 meetings. For example:
Revisions
1. Indicate that Loam is from Sedona. He knew Branch there.
2. Review whether I am using “tech” so much.
3. Reconsider Loam’s internals meant to provide background. Probably too long.
So that’s my scene sketches. I am more flexible with them than it seems from these articles. The point is that I use them to construct scenes before I commit to drafting. Then after I have begun drafting, they help me track changes and provide quick references to what is going on in a scene, without having to reread it. And they are invaluable in keeping up with, and making adjustments in, story flow as I move scenes around.
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